高分作文標(biāo)志：

　　1：是否長(zhǎng)短句交叉;

　　2、是否會(huì)使用插入語(yǔ);

　　3、用詞是否多樣，準(zhǔn)確，形象，盡量使用能夠吸引閱卷老師眼球的閃光詞;

　　4、關(guān)鍵詞是否換用，切勿老用重復(fù)詞;

　　5、句型使用是否準(zhǔn)確、地道。

　　下面給出寫好一篇作文的注意事項(xiàng)：

　　1. 適當(dāng)用被動(dòng)替換主動(dòng)，這樣能更客觀的反映事實(shí)，句子開頭不要總是用we / I (比如寫結(jié)尾時(shí)不用we should pay attention to而用Attention should be paid to. ) 舉個(gè)經(jīng)典結(jié)尾2004年六月六級(jí)作文的最后一段：It is ,therefore, high time that some applicable approaches were implemented by the service industry like that. By doing so, its competitive edge will be sharpened effectively.

　　2. 善于使用插入語(yǔ)，比如說把副詞、連接詞等，作插入語(yǔ)放在中間，一般放在主語(yǔ)、動(dòng)詞或者助動(dòng)詞后，兩邊分別加上逗號(hào)。

　　如however / therefore /for example/I believe 做插入語(yǔ)放在中間，一般放在動(dòng)詞，助動(dòng)詞后，兩邊分別加上逗號(hào)。

　　比如說： Other individuals, however, take the attitude that …

　　3. 一定要學(xué)會(huì)換詞，換形象，具體的替換太寬泛的。(考試中一般不要出現(xiàn)good, bad , many, thing, think,

　　people, opinion 等等)比如上面例子中，applicable替換proper, approaches替換ways, implement替換carry out, sharpen one's competitive edge替換enhance one's competitiveness(提高某物競(jìng)爭(zhēng)力)

　　下面舉一篇南京工程學(xué)院某位同學(xué)寫的優(yōu)秀作文(14分)的例子，看看他是如何運(yùn)用各類寫作技巧的。這位同學(xué)把老師上課講的各類寫作手法和精彩替換和句型都用上了，作文有了很大的提高。

　　Computer and I ( By Simmy )

　　I never forget the exceedingly thrilling day when my mother bought me a computer as birthday present, which exerted a tremendous fascination on me so that i indulged myself in googling an army of useful information i had expected ,and enjoy a sea of melodious classic music. That night I was sleepless, feeling that the whole world belonged to me.

　　exceedingly 替換 very

　　thrilling 替換 exciting

　　sth. exert a tremendous fascination on sb 替換 sb. be interested in sth.

　　google 替換 search

　　an army of 替換 a lot of

　　The dawn of the new century witnessed the increasing popularity of computers. Coincident with the advancement of science and technology, computers pouring into the current society as a fashion are appealing to growing individuals. It is no exaggeration to say we have been submerged by them, in large measure!

　　The dawn of the new century witnessed 是一個(gè)精彩句型，用來描述在某個(gè)時(shí)期發(fā)生了什么事情; Increasing popularity 替換 more and more popular

　　Coincident with … 非常地道的句型，表達(dá)“與…一致”的意思，替換 With …

　　Advancement 替換 development

　　Pour into ( flood into / swarm into )替換 enter into

　　Current ( currently )替換 now

　　Appeal to sb. 替換 sb. be interested in sth.

　　Growing individuals 替換 more and more people

　　It is no exaggeration to say 經(jīng)典句型， 說某事是毫不夸張的

　　For a start, we can, freely, search desired information at any moment . Little by little, our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. Additionally, we can get huge recreations online by chatting, playing games, or delivering email.

　　For a start 替換 To begin with

　　We can, freely, search 用了插入語(yǔ)的寫作手法

　　our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. 用了非常精彩的被動(dòng)

　　Additionally 替換 In addition / Besides

　　Deliver 替換 send

　　There is no denying that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings, in a way, especially the growing violence ,***, porn pictures, AV-films emerging on the screen , which leads quiet a few net citizens to copying.

　　There is no denying that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings, 這個(gè)句子有三個(gè)精彩之處，首先There is no denying that這個(gè)句型，還有however作為插入語(yǔ)， function in the disservice of 替換 do harm to

　　Emerging 替換 appearing ( fading 替換 disappearing )

　　Net citizen 網(wǎng)民，屬于精彩用詞